Re-read the short story I wrote for my workshop last Fall. It went through about four revisions but I’m not sure I like it after taking it out of deep freeze and taking another look. It’s a short story about the evolution of a relationship between a brother and a sister during World War II, not exactly incestual but not exactly not. Nothing graphic.

I think the lack of names works in this case, as does the third person. The detachment of third person is meant to keep the ambiguity of the relationship. Comma placement continues to be a plaguing problem. My grammar is terrible. I think one major problem is that it originally was a 600-or-so word flash fic that felt completely off for the fandom since the characters in the fanfiction only had a nodding acquaintance with their real counterparts. It makes me feel uncertain about the whole thing.

Anybody willing to go over it? Or even if out of bored interest, wants to read it.